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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 24, 2013 2:42:29 GMT 1
Gorvar, about the two mistakes I missed:
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Post by Clint Johnston on Jan 24, 2013 8:18:13 GMT 1
*Surprised American Black lady voice* Ohhhhhh no he didn't!
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 24, 2013 9:42:04 GMT 1
Buch, you are fired.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 24, 2013 21:39:32 GMT 1
No chapter for tonight because I am le tired. However if you want to post any ideas, please do so on this webzone and i will give you all a free pizza roll.
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Post by jklinders on Jan 25, 2013 22:10:03 GMT 1
Based on the epilogue and other asides it looks like Buch better get cracking with his editing.
Also nicely done Gorvar.
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Post by Lily Ariel Linders on Jan 25, 2013 22:59:26 GMT 1
*snickers* I love that epilogue - it's adorably snarky... and wow, I had no idea Buch was so cocky! ;D
I especially loved the cheesiness of the line:
So cheesy... ;D
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 25, 2013 23:08:34 GMT 1
Buch would take over the series if I didnt slap him back in line from time to time.
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Post by Battlechantress on Jan 25, 2013 23:23:19 GMT 1
The story's going along well, but I did spot this: "You are are savior"... probably should be "you are our savior". Sorry, just did a critique meeting with my local writing group last night. Guess I'm still in that mode.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 25, 2013 23:30:48 GMT 1
Exalt for doing a better job then Buch. You heard that, you limey bastard ?!
Edit: Where did you find that thing there Chantress? Also im just joshing with you Buch. Seriously Buch's editing makes the story WAY more read-ible.
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Post by Battlechantress on Jan 25, 2013 23:47:11 GMT 1
Buch's epilogue, I think in the second section.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 26, 2013 1:10:02 GMT 1
Actually I just noticed tons of typos in that epilogue. Suffice to say, you weren't all meant to read it.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 26, 2013 1:11:32 GMT 1
Revenge is a dish best served cold....
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 26, 2013 1:12:56 GMT 1
As for the chapter itself - it was great. The comedy / sorrows scene at the beginning with Iron and Clint was excelent. And I have been trying to guess who the other construct is but have no particular reason to know who, so it could be anyone!
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 26, 2013 1:21:13 GMT 1
Hint? Read Lind's flashback chapter, somewhere near the end. All im saying.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 26, 2013 1:24:23 GMT 1
Oh well, now I think I've got it, and it's what I was thinking too...
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