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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 21, 2013 17:08:05 GMT 1
I like character flaws!
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Post by Clint Johnston on Jan 21, 2013 17:11:32 GMT 1
But I don't have any!
(If you get this joke, exalt me)
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 21, 2013 23:00:19 GMT 1
Next chapter will be up tommorow boys and girls. Got a little delay from the home department aka had to babysit my dog while my folks went out so yeah. Did end up watching Jackie Brown though, awesome flick.
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Post by lieden on Jan 23, 2013 6:58:33 GMT 1
Hey Gorvar! I haven't gone very far yet, but your story has been cracking me up to no end! Utterly hilarious! Well done!
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 23, 2013 8:14:38 GMT 1
The latest chapter is great as always! I like the way the alleigances are shifitng, and Lily is coming into her own. And if I didn't say so yet, the image of the 'Fronkensteen' monster made up of bodies seems really vivid and clever to me.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 23, 2013 10:25:36 GMT 1
The alliances shifting around I had to thank Pirates of the Carabean for that since...well its awesome to have twists! As for Fronkensteen, I love the idea of a giant made of a thousand dead dudes. Pretty metal aint it?
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 23, 2013 11:01:28 GMT 1
It does seem like it belongs on a Meatloaf album cover, yeah. Your twists are a LOT better organised and purposed than the Pirates movies.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 23, 2013 12:39:54 GMT 1
I can never see Geoffery Rush as a serious actor ever again. Even in the King's Speech I expected him to be cracking out the pirate accent and talk about the Black Pearl.
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Post by CAPT Issac R. Madden on Jan 23, 2013 18:05:15 GMT 1
This is the exception to my "no throat cancer metal" rule. I'll add the lyrics below the vid so you don't have to decipher what he's saying.
This song really reminds me of Iron and Anaise.
Lyrics:
I wish I was free of this
I see her in my dreams Wish that she wasn't there But she still haunts me and I Still feel her breath on me Still want to taste her skin But I know that would kill me
No, damn her Still I choke on her lies Still reeling from her last caress her goodbye
Oh how this sickens me This wretched fools affair I can't erase this from me And now it permeates In every thought I feel The anger burns in my soul
No damn her Still I feel my stomach turn Choke back hold my head high im strong
No damn her Still I choke on her lies Not reeling im strong
No damn her Still I feel my stomach turn choke back hold my head high im strong
No damn her Still I choke on her lies Not reeling im strong
I wish I was free of This
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 23, 2013 22:35:32 GMT 1
Sounds pretty damn awesome. Glad im inspiring this stuff!
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Post by CAPT Issac R. Madden on Jan 23, 2013 22:52:47 GMT 1
Like I said, I don't usually like songs like that. But having experienced a toxic relationship first hand, I feel that the screaming vocals do a hell of a job of portraying the anger and pain such a relationship causes.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 24, 2013 1:02:48 GMT 1
Chapter 19 is out folks! Special thanks to Buch for being an awesome editing guy who puts snarky one liners in the comments bar of the word files. May his awesomeness outweigh his Britshiness.
Edit: Also I will delve into the Iron/anaise relationship a bit more.
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Post by jklinders on Jan 24, 2013 1:52:46 GMT 1
I think there was a slight mistake in the chapter involving character names.
"Linders pushed a trashed ox cart aside as he ran to the cliff where Tillian was. She was cackling madly as she urged her creation to smash everything around it. Behind her were two monstrous versions of the Magistrate and Ronnoc. Magistrate Hodster was now a terrible lizardman with large claws, teeth, tiny eyes and spikes that ran across his spine. Ronnoc was a minotaur now, but on fire and with a large battle axe."
I think Tillian was supposed to read Lillian.
Great chapter. I forgot that there was gonna be more after the epic battle. Gonna be hard to top this though.
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Post by Lily Ariel Linders on Jan 24, 2013 1:56:54 GMT 1
I think there was a slight mistake in the chapter involving character names. "Linders pushed a trashed ox cart aside as he ran to the cliff where Tillian was. She was cackling madly as she urged her creation to smash everything around it. Behind her were two monstrous versions of the Magistrate and Ronnoc. Magistrate Hodster was now a terrible lizardman with large claws, teeth, tiny eyes and spikes that ran across his spine. Ronnoc was a minotaur now, but on fire and with a large battle axe." I think Tillian was supposed to read Lillian. Great chapter. I forgot that there was gonna be more after the epic battle. Gonna be hard to top this though. Also, isn't Linders simply called Lind in the story? I don't recall seeing him named as Linders before that... But yeah, Gorvar, this story continues to be awesome... I'd say something more articulate, but I have a monstrous headache trying to rip its way through my eyes at the moment so I am only online for another minute or so before I go to bed... Keep up the great writing!
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 24, 2013 1:57:56 GMT 1
Tis Lillian, my thanks! And for the next few chapters, there is gonna be some twists and turns, all im saying.
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