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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 9, 2013 15:21:43 GMT 1
I thought I would start a new thread, I hope no-one minds.
So this is a piece of writing in which Gorvar and I spend our time watching Robert Picardo pole-dancing.
Really good fun so far. Looking forward to seeing more of these characters and how they represent us. Already they seem to be showing different sides to us than the other story did, so that's neat.
Also --- I Ron Madden. I just got that.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Apr 9, 2013 15:23:41 GMT 1
I put so many in-jokes from all kinds of SF shows and video games in that first chapter you dont even know.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 9, 2013 15:26:16 GMT 1
I think there were a lot I didn't 'get' - at the end especially.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Apr 9, 2013 15:48:08 GMT 1
And you call yourself a nerd....phah!
JK, glad you liked that first chapter dude.
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Post by CAPT Issac R. Madden on Apr 11, 2013 22:10:02 GMT 1
Wow, Gorv. You're going all out for the sci fi references. Nicely done.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 11, 2013 22:34:57 GMT 1
Cool stuff! I like the Star Trek feel to it and this idea of all sorts of sci-fi worlds converging. That's a really neat idea. Also is Lieden now Doctor Who?
Tiny criticism - you say Buchalan mutters in a language which is mixed out of Welsh and Scottish. 'Scottish' was never the name of a language but you might say Gaelic, which existed / exists in Scotland! But the image of me or my ancestors or my future generations being drunk pervy wastrels is accurate.
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Post by Clint Johnston on Apr 12, 2013 4:58:12 GMT 1
Prince, eh? I'm tempted not to provide my original critique...
Oh what the hell. This chapter was OK, but was too frenetic. Too much was happening. I try to stick to the rule of three. If I want to do homages in a section, I pick 3 key points. I use the best one as the final one (the Doctor here was a great choice).
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Apr 12, 2013 9:34:09 GMT 1
To frenetic? Ouch....sorry to hear that dude. Its going to get worse in the later chapters. Ill try to reign it in, with other universes I sort of get carried away, it's a omni verse kinda thing. As for the Gealic thing, gonna edit that right away!
And yes I made Lieden the biggest Deus Ex Mahcina character ever because I didnt include her in the last incarnation of the Blue Lady as a make-upance.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2013 9:52:04 GMT 1
I wish I could speak Welsh and Gaelic, man. I always feel like I drew the UK short straw by being born and brought up in England, The Most Boring Country. But then I also wish that Lieden was Doctor Who. 'Gorvar the Gorn' made me laugh.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Apr 12, 2013 9:54:22 GMT 1
Well since I cant see JP in 3D...it felt right to change y'know? Move on with my life. .... I still cant sleep at nights.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2013 9:58:02 GMT 1
That really is a shame! There ought to be a Kickstarter for it. Lord knows everybody else in the world has a Kickstarter these days.
I'm thinking of getting one just for my groceries. If we reach £10,000 then every donor gets a signed photo of me eating the groceries.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Apr 12, 2013 10:01:31 GMT 1
I would donate! Only if its sunday roast though.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2013 14:11:20 GMT 1
You are respectful and understanding of my people. There is a place for you on Tuchanka.
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Post by Clint Johnston on Apr 12, 2013 14:40:09 GMT 1
What's the reward for $500?
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Apr 12, 2013 14:41:36 GMT 1
Well I did mate with one of your females. .... Dont say that to my girlfriend or she will deck me super hard. Not the good kind of hard decking, the bad kind.
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