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Post by Cali on Feb 16, 2011 0:42:33 GMT 1
I haven't got a chance to read all of the chapters yet, since I've trying to been focusing on Cyan Steel as much as possible. Anyway, so far I think you have captured the personalities of the characters quite well, especially Joker. This isn't easy to do with Mass Effect's original characters, and for this I applaud you. What I don't really fancy is how Shepard treated Anderson in Chapter 2. I mean, he should have a little more respect for the man who played a part in making who he was, and stood up for him. Though Commander Shepard is in the eyes of who plays him/her, so it's excusable. Shepard admitting that he loved Williams was also a tad far fetched, at least in my opinion as far as military fraternization goes. Though to be fair, Shepard isn't technically attached to the military at this point (KIA), and Captain/Councilor Anderson is distinguished for being the most understanding character in the ME universe. So I'll let that go. I'll admit, I haven't been reading any fics that shed light on the Williams/Alenko love interests, post Omega 4 relay mission, so this is all fresh to me. I'll definitely continue with this one. Keep them coming.
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Post by millashepardsr2 on Feb 17, 2011 0:21:15 GMT 1
Thanks Cali-mah for the review! I'm glad you like, and will continue to read it. It's easy to understand how you could feel a bit upset about Shep's reaction to Anderson in Chapter 2. We all have our own ME experiences and therefore our own opinions of the characters. I'm glad you can look past this though and continue to enjoy my fic. Cheers!
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Post by ubermensch on Feb 28, 2011 19:33:41 GMT 1
I too didn't care for how Shep treated Andy in Ch2.Seeing as how if it wasn't for Captain Anderson the Normandy SR-1 would have never got off the Citadel to go after Saren on Illos: but be that as it may, i've read ever chapter of your story thus far millashepardsr2, and i just want to tell you that you're a real talent The only thing as good as a writer who is creative, imaginitive and has style, is a writer who sounds like they know what there talking about. During the 'ER' portion of the story in Dr.Chackwas Med Bay, what you wrote came across quite authenticly: Are you a med student? I prefer as much dialoge as possile and as little narration as necessary, but you strike a good balance betwixt the two.Its funny, in some ways, I almost feel as though your Fanfic and mine (Commander Shepards Log: 2185) are compatible in many ways, story wise.I can't wait to see how Liara and Ashley's reunion will play out in the next chapter That should be... pretty awkward And sort of a low blow for Shep/Ash to rub thier romance in T'Soni's face like that -_- Good move adding 'New Chapters' on Valentine's Day.Just one thing though, 'plot wise' Without a Reaper IFF Device, it is impossible to safely navigate the Omega-4 Relay, only the Normandy SR-2 has one, so Cerebus Command could not have done what you have them do.And Shepard also has Cerebus by the balls: What with having recovered the N7: Lost Operative Data, that can do irreperable damage to Cerebus Operations.Baring this in mind,more than a suspension of disbelief is required while reading your story, one has to just simply, disregard this 'canon' information entirely :lol: But your story is interesting, so i'll keep reading ^_^
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