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Post by Battlechantress on Jul 30, 2010 3:14:24 GMT 1
Aside from a few small typos and missing punctuation, I couldn't really find anything wrong with this story in the first two chapters (except for this one sentence): Blasto: "This one responses and requests you inform it as to the reasons for your interruption." < should be "responds" I loved the name changes and had a few laughs, so thank you for writing this. I'll go over the other chapters sometime in the next couple of days. Cheers.
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Post by yargling on Aug 1, 2010 10:19:19 GMT 1
Thanks for the feedback! Hope you enjoy the rest of the chapters - I added another one today. I'm trying to add one per week until I've parodied the whole of ME 2, or at least a fair chunk of it given the game is so huge in writing terms, heh.
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