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Post by ravenchick on Dec 4, 2009 10:23:11 GMT 1
Good intro that created the setting and the tension to the story. It had a darker feel to it that brought energy to the tale.
I did find myself wanting a little more description to flesh out the scene and a bit more about the characters.
Good job!
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Post by grungehead1991 on Dec 6, 2009 8:39:36 GMT 1
thanks. ;D yeah i was planning on adding more background to the charecters in the 2nd post (which is up).
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Post by N7v1K0 on Dec 8, 2009 23:22:55 GMT 1
A very entertaining read!
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