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Post by Mister Buch on Jun 29, 2008 11:40:59 GMT 1
I laughed a lot. A lovely idea nicely done. It could have used a spell check, but I only say that because I'm really finicky about spelling and grammar. Ignore me. I loved 'Kaiden, what the hell are you wearing?' And this bit took me a moment, but when I did get it, there was a big bellylaugh. Bastila: It appears that your other self, in his fury killed her. Carth: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Superb, that. Although, personally, I hate script format.
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Post by Rascarin on Jun 29, 2008 13:44:30 GMT 1
Pretty cool. I'm glad I'm not the only one that things that Kaidan is basiacally a copy-paste of Carth, minus the jacket and facial fuzz. 'Specially liked the last line. Nice touch
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Post by Hodster on Jun 29, 2008 14:35:53 GMT 1
Thanks for the reviews ;D I wrote this in a few hours yesterday. I wanted to get a story on before I went on vacation. I won't be back on in a week so I'll be looking forward to hopfully more stories on here. And ya i know there are spelling mistakes i didn't really have time to look over it
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Post by sabby87 on Jul 10, 2008 22:19:42 GMT 1
I laughed a lot!
That's why I like both of them ;D (ok, now you'll kill me)
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Post by Zarsthor on Jun 29, 2009 23:45:38 GMT 1
That was legendary! Kaiden gets a mission of his own and manages to actually survive. If you think kaiden's useless you should seriously have seen what i saw on Mass Effect the other day when playing with Liara. I was fighting a ton of guys with an engineer and was kind of losing. Thats when I realized nobody was shooting bullets on my team. I turn around, Tali is dead and Liara is squatted on the floor with her arms wrapped around her like one of those Thorian's. She did nothing for an hour whilst I took everything out on my own.
Anywho, great piece. Witty, funny and full of cameo's. Very reminiscent of the Iraq war. Not much I can stay about the writing as it was done in a script style, but it got to the point and did is job with great execution.
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