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Post by Mister Buch on Jul 15, 2009 15:01:04 GMT 1
It's good to see a story about Wrex and his mercenary life. It hadn't occured to me but there's such a good opportunity for stories in that.
I love the first line about the fruity drink. The whole story has that same dry, amoral sense of humour about it that makes Wrex so likeable. So this was good. More Wrex! Also, why not put it on FF.net too?
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Post by Zarsthor on Jul 15, 2009 15:06:58 GMT 1
I think I've done a boo boo. The first krogan is a different one to Wrex. Wrex just sees the other Krogan pass by at the end of the chapter and then continues his covnersation with the salarian. Its my krogan romance story thats why its not on FF.net. Anytho I think I'm going to try and edit the chapter again. Glad you liked the humour.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jul 15, 2009 15:13:57 GMT 1
Ah crap, it seems I wasn't paying attention. I thought it was Wrex the whole time - I missed the transition line. My bad. I just saw 'the krogan mercenary' and thought, 'Hey it's Wrex!'
'Reaper's Return' was good too.
Oh this is the Krogan romance. Cool. Good luck!
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Post by Zarsthor on Jul 15, 2009 15:32:56 GMT 1
Ha ha. Thanks Buchy. I did try to make it clear they were different krogan but its hard tor eally distinquish when the first krogan hasn't been named yet. I'll see if I can get it any more differentiated before I let chapter 2 go.
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N7v1K0
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This one has no time for your solid waste excretions.
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Post by N7v1K0 on Nov 26, 2009 23:16:31 GMT 1
Uh oh! illusiveman posted in the story's thread...
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Post by Zarsthor on Nov 27, 2009 2:26:44 GMT 1
That naughty illusiveman. Mass Effect 2 isn't even out yet but he's managing to be dodgy....
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Post by grungehead1991 on Dec 6, 2009 8:57:10 GMT 1
thought you did a good job of getting wrex's personality right . It was pretty good, and quite entertaining. Good job ;D
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Post by Zarsthor on Dec 6, 2009 9:25:33 GMT 1
lol why are people still reading that? I promised I'd fix the first chapter months ago but I've been kind of busy so I haven't been able to post more chapters or the fixed version of the intro. *Sigh*
I mean thanks for reading and reviewing. Its just... you know. Delayed devotion post one is like a half drawn picture in my head and I feel bad anybody is assuming I write like that normally. What am I talking about anymore, I don't know I haven't spelt in 48+ hours and the world is amusingly fluffy.
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Post by grungehead1991 on Dec 6, 2009 9:40:22 GMT 1
i was just looking through some of the stuff to check out when people had written. i didn't think it was that bad
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Post by Zarsthor on Dec 6, 2009 9:49:36 GMT 1
Its just really not my normal standard I feel really conscious about it. I would delete it until I do the re-edit if I could.
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