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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 8, 2012 19:35:18 GMT 1
I was in a firefly mood and I had to make a character for a Me MSN rp that will start soon, so i came up with Luke here. If you lot got any heads up or wish to slap my face silly lemme know here.
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Post by Cali on Jan 8, 2012 19:48:57 GMT 1
I actually really liked it.
Some pretty bad grammatical errors here and there (especially putting the word 'an' where 'a' should be), though English isn't exactly a Belgian's first language so no biggie.
I've really liked the idea of combining ME with a western/frontier theme, and looks like you've beat me to it.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 8, 2012 20:57:49 GMT 1
Hell if you got any ideas, go for it. ;D Might make this a series though.... Yeh i'll go check on them errors, i keep sucking at them.
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UzielTD
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Post by UzielTD on Jan 8, 2012 23:48:20 GMT 1
Yeah, a lot of grammatical errors. I laughed when you wrote dessert instead of desert, cause I used to make that mistake a lot too. Could never remember if it was one S or two.
I like it though. You got the canon characters down pretty good, like the quip Grunt made about the bottles. I enjoy this style of writing, where the dialogue moves the story, and it doesn't have three paragraphs describing the sky.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 8, 2012 23:51:30 GMT 1
Well the Collectors could have an sweettooth to, i mean you can only be indoctronated for only so long ;D Need a grammar person though...
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