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Post by Cali on Aug 21, 2011 19:40:14 GMT 1
What's up, amedaus. It's CaliforniaTD from the MEFF Wiki.
I'm going to be brutally honest with you here: the story needs work. The plot seems interesting enough so far, it's the prose I'm turned off by.
Using a regular writing style for descriptions and action and script formatting for your dialogue is kind of a convoluted and unnecessary way to do things. Blurring the line between the two is not a very good idea.
Just my two tenths of a dime. Welcome back to the forums, Amedaus.
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Post by Cali on Aug 22, 2011 5:46:33 GMT 1
Well amedaus, Abraham Lincoln once said that it's measure of a man to admit fault. And seeing how you have admitted it, I'm quite proud. I think you'll go a very long way if you keep in the writing field and work on your skills. Anyway, I'll be sure to read the whole thing sometime later. A bit preoccupied right now.
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