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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Apr 11, 2009 5:30:59 GMT 1
Nice pacing, interesting original characters, especially the Major, nice tense scene...
Then the last part just punched me in the gut hard as I was drinking a bottle of beer while reading it. >.<
(Good job btw though. I like it)
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 11, 2009 11:20:11 GMT 1
Thanks Tillian This story was meant to be just a joke - I wanted to see how long and serious I could make the build-up to that silly punchline. I may have gotten carried away.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Apr 11, 2009 11:26:05 GMT 1
Don't worry, it's perfect to a tee. Leave it like that
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Post by Hodster on Apr 19, 2009 20:11:41 GMT 1
That was a very great build up, and once I got to the end I lost it.
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Post by Rascarin on Apr 19, 2009 21:50:25 GMT 1
This story causes me the greatest of confusion.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 19, 2009 22:13:02 GMT 1
Thanks guys. I just really wanted to make a 'Colonel Sanders' joke. Did you see the film Spaceballs Rascarin?
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Post by Rascarin on Apr 19, 2009 22:31:57 GMT 1
Spaceballs? I don't believe I have...
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 19, 2009 22:41:03 GMT 1
Ah! That explains it. The whole fic was a build-up to that Colonel Sanders joke (you know, the KFC guy) - because of what happens in this scene- www.youtube.com/watch?v=ogbGLV8QR58
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Post by Hodster on Apr 19, 2009 22:51:28 GMT 1
Rascarin go out and rent/buy Spaceballs right now ;D
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Post by Rascarin on Apr 19, 2009 23:17:07 GMT 1
I understand now! Hehehe, now its funny instead of bewildering.
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