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Post by Zarsthor on Jul 10, 2009 23:39:50 GMT 1
I haven't a problem with erotica but girls on Fanfiction.net really like to push that boat out and dock it in Amsterdam. That was really funny ;D Yes I notice people like to laugh at how I talk. lol Don't worry Buchy! I'm no taking offence I'm laughing at you laghing at me laughing and ... something.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jul 10, 2009 23:49:45 GMT 1
Nice Don't worry I just meant it was a funny joke.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Aug 19, 2009 15:52:52 GMT 1
I found another problem...
When I was in the middle of writing my fan fic... I'm a bit concerned about being inaccurute about Shepard's reaction with the world around her and her emotions due to the truma that befell on her.
I've been reading up on Wikipedia but I felt that's not enough information... I felt I need to see that feeling first hand or digging up examination notes that explains the patient in greater detail.
Maybe I'm over complicating myself, I don't know. Maybe it's time for me to get a beta reader sooner or later.
Then again that's probably why most people scoff at the colonist backdrop.
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Post by Zarsthor on Aug 19, 2009 19:22:43 GMT 1
The persons reaction depends on the person. Shepard's a soldier. A hard case. Rather than get emotional they get even. All that anger programming. At some point its going to bottle up and leave her paralyzed before she can re bandage herself but like any good soldier she'll keep it private and do her job. Thats my two cents anyway.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Aug 20, 2009 2:34:18 GMT 1
If Shepard's a soldier, I'll have a better time writting this but this about her life before the military. This when she's still a teenager.
I've been trying to put a a decent portryal while leading up to her fateful decision when she turns 18 and decides to join the Navy.
So yeah.... so difficult
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Post by Zarsthor on Aug 20, 2009 2:44:01 GMT 1
Well if she has the mindset to join the military thats a sign of a dominating personality anyway. I still believe she'd be a strong persona but a little more unsure of herself as most teenagers are. Perhaps someone who distances themselves from situations and analyzes until they feel comfortable enough to join it. Probably analyze what she see's and feels with a detachment before reacting but even then the reaction would be more subdued. Half held in, half let out whilst trying to exert calm control over her own emotions.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Aug 20, 2009 2:48:59 GMT 1
Hmmm... you make a good strong point, I was worried I'll turn my Shepard in that story into a fluff piece.
I'll re-look at my chapter again and follow that trail. Should be eaiser now.
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Post by Zarsthor on Aug 20, 2009 2:51:53 GMT 1
lol Glad to have helped but a little fluff isn't a bad thing.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Aug 20, 2009 2:54:59 GMT 1
I suppose but I'm trying not to be fluffy as possible. I think I've fluff too much in the first chapter in Mindoir's Lullaby... that's bad enough. I'm concerned with the 2nd chapter.
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Post by Zarsthor on Aug 20, 2009 3:07:43 GMT 1
Well if you want any help with it I could always give it a read through and give you my honest opinions.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Aug 20, 2009 3:18:40 GMT 1
Yes that would be nice, Zars. I would be happy to hear it out, even it's bluntly honest.
Be warned... I've clocked 5k words in that chapter.
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Post by Zarsthor on Aug 20, 2009 3:26:13 GMT 1
I will getting reading and give you my report then. lol It might have to wait until after Friday though. I'm writing an essay at the moment.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Aug 20, 2009 10:27:26 GMT 1
That's alright I can wait a little longer, besides, I've decided to take a break from writting. Can't write stuff when my head is is not in the right place.
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Post by Zarsthor on Aug 20, 2009 15:33:30 GMT 1
Go relax tilly. Do some drawing or sit in the sun and enjoy life. We all need a break.
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