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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 26, 2014 13:37:15 GMT 1
I'm not trying to get readers to accept my stuff. They're meant to like it! 'Okay' is disappointing. I was hoping it wouldn't just be interesting to a niche audience, too. I try to avoid that, but at the same time I'm writing about what I see, you know? Woody Allen writes about New York intellectuals, I write about Manchester-based angry failures. If you have any suggestions or points about what let the story down, I'd love to hear them.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 26, 2014 14:05:27 GMT 1
MORE DINOSAAAUUUURS! ...
Okay seriously, personally I think you did it right given the source material. You went pretty much Tarentino on this which i can always apreciate.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 26, 2014 15:12:22 GMT 1
Thanks again. But it's okay, I'm not demanding positive feedback, just begging for more, you know.
But how do you mean Tarantino? Curious about that!
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 26, 2014 15:56:44 GMT 1
Mostly the cursing really, also making dialogues flow and an internal monogloue about life stuff. Like how she called out certain tidbits she knows from working at the train line ( stgops, kind of passengers and the like).
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Post by Clint Johnston on Jan 26, 2014 21:48:27 GMT 1
Gorvar, they may be "slags" but at least they taught us proper grammar and spelling!
Buch, I'll take a closer look at it tomorrow.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 26, 2014 23:08:06 GMT 1
But Gorvar's mum taught him two languages. I wish my French was as good as Gorvar's English.
Yes French. Yes trolling.
Clint - I'd hate to pressure you to do that! I'm just fishing for criticism is all. Any feedback at all, even 'good', 'okay' or 'bad' is helpful.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 27, 2014 0:33:33 GMT 1
French is my third lingo ya jerks!
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 27, 2014 0:49:16 GMT 1
It so is not. He keeps saying that.
But we all know that he's Belgian, and in Belguim they speak French.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 27, 2014 1:06:41 GMT 1
I'm one of the Dutch speaking Belgians. We call ourselves Flemish, the French Belgians are called Walloons. Our relationship is kinda like you limey gits and the Scottish. AKA we dont like each other but we have to work together.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 27, 2014 1:11:20 GMT 1
So he says. The story gets more ridiculous every time I accidentally mention his Frenchness, I swear.
Pretty sure he just made up the word 'Walloons' this time too.
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Post by salty on Jan 27, 2014 1:18:26 GMT 1
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 27, 2014 1:20:26 GMT 1
Sorry Salty - I was just teasing him. I like to say he speaks French because it seems to annoy him and I love it when I make him explain the difference.
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 27, 2014 1:22:46 GMT 1
Besides which, for all I know he wrote that Wiki page himself. Sacre bleu.
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Post by salty on Jan 27, 2014 1:23:09 GMT 1
Ah got ya Bit like when people say we speak British ;-) Although with me it's a broad Norfolk accent lol
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Post by Mister Buch on Jan 27, 2014 1:25:03 GMT 1
Don't get me started... some of these North Americans here drive me crazy when they confuse 'England' and 'Britain', and with some of their misconceptions.
Aside from Gorvar, not one of these people understands what fish & chips is. I've been over it twice like an angry teacher. xD
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