bxa
Serviceman 3rd Class
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Post by bxa on Jan 19, 2015 23:32:49 GMT 1
All comments welcome. Ideas would be nice too actually, although I'm almost finished with the first part and currently in the process of editing it.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jan 20, 2015 11:25:07 GMT 1
Okay first off, kinda liking this Shepard here. However I need to say...why do you hate the enter button? He is your friend. Your chum. You are making him sad for not using him to much Walls of texts are hard to read and scare of readers, try to create paragraphs more often so it's easier on the eyes.
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bxa
Serviceman 3rd Class
Posts: 3
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Post by bxa on Jan 20, 2015 11:34:20 GMT 1
Thanks :-) And you're right, it looks really cluttered, so I'm going to try and fix that before I upload the next few chapters
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