mizdirected
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Le sigh... le pant... le gasp
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Post by mizdirected on Jun 11, 2013 14:27:46 GMT 1
Soooooooo... I guess I need to post a thread for people to say... "Wow... *shakes head sadly* You are delusional, but I like that about you." Or don't like that... whichever. I am a writer of non fanfic and an editor, so if you need to be brutal, go for it baby. I possess a lovely thick skin and a lot of fluids to replenish my body from the pitiful sobbing.
Seriously though, I do welcome all comments. I do not apply the same editorial ardour to my fanfic that I do to other writing, but coherent and at least decently written is important at all times. Cheers, and I hope to hear from some people.
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mizdirected
Serviceman 3rd Class
Le sigh... le pant... le gasp
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Post by mizdirected on Jun 12, 2013 14:02:24 GMT 1
Just a quick note that I will review people as I can... starting at the top of the list, or if something grabs me, but if you want a review, please do message me with the name of the piece and what sort of review you want, cursory or in depth, and I will oblige as soon as I can. My default reviews will be in depth, so if I review you and your reaction is... 'Wait, I don't care if the subject and verb agree in every sentence, just tell me if the plot holds together' message me again, and I will adjust for future reviews.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jun 17, 2013 9:41:40 GMT 1
Holy crap this is a lot of text. Okay well I just read the first part...and I love the romance between Femshep and Garrus. You write it down very welland i believe they are a nice and wel conencting couple. Seriously, kudos on that one. The only nasty thing i have to say...well "nasty" is that you skipped through Arrival with a breeze. Now i dont blame you if you want to focus on other aspects of the story, but that is just my two cents.
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mizdirected
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Post by mizdirected on Jun 20, 2013 2:37:49 GMT 1
Thanks so much for your reply. And yeah, I probably should have broken the first chunk into separate posts. Its an imposing wall of text to be sure. I actually wrote Shepard all the way through Arrival, but left most of it out due strictly to intellectual property issues. I didn't want to post any game content, even paraphrased. Had a big chunk from the Mars mission too, saying the stuff to Kaidan I wish we could have said in the game, like STFU! dang it! lol But left it out too.
Thanks again for reading and your thoughts.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Jun 20, 2013 8:38:15 GMT 1
Well like I said I can understand why you cut it out. personally I sort of liked Arrival because of how those 300 000 dead people would weigh heavily on Shepard's shoulders. But again I like how you handeld the Garrus Romance, which is my fav for Femshep, and the little I saw of Kaiden...well it makes sense really. Horizon was rpetty much a dick move on his part, but an udnerstandible dick move.
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mizdirected
Serviceman 3rd Class
Le sigh... le pant... le gasp
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Post by mizdirected on Jun 21, 2013 0:08:16 GMT 1
I realized what you were saying, and what I'd done this afternoon. I'd made everything after coming back from Aratoht all about the legal consequences, rather than Shepard still struggling with the rest of the consequences. I wrote more of that in and changed the story on fanfic.net. Obviously, a career soldier doesn't sit in a corner sucking her thumb and rocking for six months with Reapers breathing down their necks, but yeah... I'd left it out entirely. Thanks.
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