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Post by Mister Buch on May 1, 2013 19:04:56 GMT 1
You and Tillian really are soul mates, you know. Just putting that out there. You're both all about these film noir crime stories.
I could never see the appeal. (But I do love the Steve Martin comedy Dead Men Don't Wear Plaid. "As she walked outta the room I couldn't take my eyes off her. I hadn't seen a body so well put-together since I solved The Case of the Murdered Girl With the Big Tits.")
Anyway. xD
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Like I said to you before I like this very strange (very imaginative) take on the characters and situation. So far it looks good! Well written, good voices for everybody. Garrus and Mordin especially.
I love how Garrus and Mordin have been cast. With the way they talk especially, they seem like they were born to be a cold detective and a funny pathologist. That really works. And I like the tone too.
Also - you and your cowboys!
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 1, 2013 19:28:56 GMT 1
I friggin; love cowboys and dinosaurs! And Tillian, but dont tell to her or my GF...
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Post by Mister Buch on May 1, 2013 19:30:35 GMT 1
Sometimes I wonder if you ARE Tillian in disguise.
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Post by Lily Ariel Linders on May 1, 2013 22:50:34 GMT 1
Sometimes I wonder if you ARE Tillian in disguise. Hmm... I wonder... Tillian and Gorvar are both absolutely adorable... it makes sense... A-HA!I knew it!! ;D (just kidding)
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 1, 2013 23:26:04 GMT 1
You know, here I try to contribute to the Mass Effect FANFICTION board with a interesting story and you al laugh it me. No, it;s okay. I get that. It;s fine. You know what, screw you lot!
I'm going to make my own Forum! With blackjack and hot dino women and....I said this before. .... Buch, can you get me off the hook? For all time sakes?
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Post by Mister Buch on May 1, 2013 23:31:44 GMT 1
Okay don't worry brutha I got this I ADMIRE YOUR USE OF THE PRESENT TENSE AND FIND IT REFRESHINGLY DROLE IN A SETTING NORMALLY BESET BY UNORIGINALITY he is so Tillian he just literally puts on a wig YES YES NICE LITTLE TURNS OF PHRASE THAT BLEND THE DRAMA YOU'RE BUILDING TOWARDS WITH A WITTY LIGHTNESS THAT HELPS ESTABLISH THE PREMISE VERY NICE
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 2, 2013 9:15:37 GMT 1
Now is the winter of my discontent....
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 16, 2013 0:21:21 GMT 1
I'll have chapter 1 up tommorow even if it kills me!
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Post by Mister Buch on May 16, 2013 0:34:01 GMT 1
Just after Tillian released an update, eh.
VERY COINCIDENTAL, 'Gorvar'.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 16, 2013 10:07:09 GMT 1
It's an competitive thing...
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Post by Mister Buch on May 16, 2013 22:57:40 GMT 1
'Urdnot Gorvar' - I loved that.
he quality of the dialogue is really good here - nothing seems extraneous or unimportant. Mordin in particular is fantastic here. The bit where Shep and Alenko meet and that bit about 'It wasn't an easy choice' - really clever bit. And I loved all that stuff you came up with for the metal in the talons - really neat idea.
Looking forward to 'the' Joker too. He's a big favourite character for me and I always wondered what he's be like in 'real life' since he seems to live for his pilot's seat at work.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 16, 2013 23:14:26 GMT 1
Thanks for the read Buch! I've never done a murder detective story before sooo it can swing both ways.I aready gave a clue about the killer's race here, i'll leave it at that. Joker is going to be a tad different in this one but he will still be himself.
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Post by Mister Buch on May 16, 2013 23:20:02 GMT 1
For someone who's never done a detective story, you seem to be nailing it. Seems to get it and I'd say it avoids jut being cliches. But I haven't really read / seen very many detective stories, so I'm not a good judge.
I was thinking about writing one (in a fantasy world - where the investigator is an elven assassin) so I hope I can get a hold of it as well.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 16, 2013 23:36:36 GMT 1
Just watch a few movies and your good.
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Post by Mister Buch on May 22, 2013 0:44:17 GMT 1
Looking good. Chora's Den had to be there of course. And I like what you did with Joker. Made me pretty sad. Alenko is great in this as well, by the way. You've captured everything I like about him.
Also 'The Blue Giants' is the best name for a ban ever. I I'm ever in a band it's called that.
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