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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2012 11:53:18 GMT 1
(Thought I would start up a new thread since the title has changed and the story rebooted.)
Looking good so far, Tillian. I like those first two pages - they look good, showing us a range of things, starting with images of space as all good space opera should... the councillors look really good to me for some reason. Charming. I like that.
I'd suggest releasing more pages than two at a time though, because it's hard to get 'into' such a short snatch of story.
And maybe the backgrounds could have more detail, straight lines. But over all I really like the art style and the designs and the work on these pages. More so than the last version.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Apr 12, 2012 14:20:49 GMT 1
Well, if you noticed with the four people in the 2nd page... they don't really look like the council members in-game. Especially if they kinda look unruly. You might see why later on. However, they do play a big part in the comics, hence they are there for a reason.
I'll be honest with you Chris, two is probably the max I could get per week in terms of keeping things on time at the moment, mainly the process in creating a page is not that... easy as writing a written fan fic. If I'm lucky, I can post more than two pages. I see how it goes.
I'm still working on the backgrounds, but I can promise you that I'll try to make a decent effort in it, especially if I want to bested the official comics. Admittaly, I actually like these pages better than the old version of the comic.
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Post by Mr. Glow on Apr 12, 2012 15:02:57 GMT 1
As Buch said, what's there is good, but it's pretty much impossible to get into a story with only two pages. I'm sure that'll change as the story goes, though.
The space stuff looks really nice, as well.
Anyway, I like the new title, and the turian Vitruvian Man! (Viturian Man?)
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2012 15:06:42 GMT 1
Viturian man!!
You little Bobby-Dazzler.
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Post by lieden on Apr 12, 2012 15:29:24 GMT 1
I think it would be best to -start- the comic with 2-3 pages at once, then update at a pace comfortable to you (I think 1/week is fine). Care for any input regarding the visual aspect of it?
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on Apr 12, 2012 15:52:58 GMT 1
Care for any input regarding the visual aspect of it? Yes please! Anything would help me improve my art skills. I guess I'll try to post another 2-3 batch at once in the beginning, just to keep some people in the loop. Once things settle down, I'll post 1-2 pages per week. By the way, see that green planet? I painted myself Buch. That's how much effort I'm willing to push so far. I had to look back at the turian books and notes on tips to draw space and stuff.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on Apr 12, 2012 17:38:00 GMT 1
Loving the art so far, but yeh two pages is a bit to short to get a mood going.
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Post by jklinders on Apr 12, 2012 19:00:57 GMT 1
Looking good.
I've seen some real progress on your work in the past year. It's getting better. It was really apparent on the facial features of the Turian Councillor.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2012 19:46:05 GMT 1
The space and the planet did look very good. The faces on the councillors were what really impressed me, but the space was good.
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Post by Cali on Apr 12, 2012 20:09:11 GMT 1
Looks pretty good so far, especially the character and ship designs. There are several typos, however.
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2012 21:15:15 GMT 1
Typos?! I beta-read the text myself!
But now that you mention it, he's right. I see an extra L in 'galactic' on the first panel. Damn. That's all I see though?
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Post by Cali on Apr 12, 2012 22:17:39 GMT 1
Yeah that, and Civilization should have a 'Z' instead of an 'S'.
English isn't Till's first language, so I should probably take it a little easier and not be such a grammar nazi. :\
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Post by Mister Buch on Apr 12, 2012 22:35:28 GMT 1
I beleive the S / Z thing is correct in Australia and the UK.
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Post by Cali on Apr 12, 2012 22:52:47 GMT 1
Well forgive my ramen-eating, Budweiser drinking, Tea hating, right-side-of-the-road driving, Yankee doodle ignorance.
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Post by jklinders on Apr 12, 2012 23:16:14 GMT 1
Doesn't help that all spellcheck uses US English. I am sick of the red lines under words that end in "our" in Canadian and UK English.
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