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Post by Tillian Panthesis on May 15, 2011 16:59:15 GMT 1
Whoa! It's been a while since I've read something that is gritty as this. Not saying it's a bad thing, I've actually enjoy it!
The only complaint I have with this fic is that... a its over too soon. Can't wait to see more of this.
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Post by Mr. Glow on May 15, 2011 20:00:49 GMT 1
Thanks a lot! It was my intention to explore the darker and grittier edges of the Mass Effect universe, and expand further on Thane and Kolyat's relationship. I'm not sure how well it'll end up, but the next chapters should be online tomorrow!
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Post by Cali on May 15, 2011 20:19:24 GMT 1
The only problems I had with it was that the non existent word "crunchtastic" was used, as well as the rather short length of it. But to be fair, my chapters have a tendency to be pretty short, too.
Keep 'em coming. I haven't seen a prison drama set in the Mass Effect universe before, so this'll be something new.
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Post by Mr. Glow on May 15, 2011 21:26:05 GMT 1
Thanks Cali. I've always wanted to author a prison drama, and it just goes with the Mass Effect universe like chalk and cheese!
You can expect this series to be ungoing.
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Post by Tillian Panthesis on May 16, 2011 9:02:49 GMT 1
I'm not the best when it comes to grammar and... well the prison scene is quite distracting.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 25, 2011 22:48:47 GMT 1
I liked this one...I really, REALLY liked it. I'm sensing Sawshank Redemption in space somehow, but that's just me. The only gripe i really had with the mention of Christmas since...well it's a human holiday, think the Hanar would have something else for a holiday. ... Yeh i just imagined a Hanar in a santa suit anyway, i'm following this story, looks AWESUM.
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Post by Cali on May 26, 2011 6:11:56 GMT 1
"Alive by morning?" Koylat was expected to get raped, not get shanked. Prison rapists always want their sex slaves to live and protect them as such. Bit of a canon confliction: Chora's Den closed down and never reopened after the citadel attack. wat Sorry, this is getting really weird, even by prison drama standards. Though I admit, I'll still read the rest when you post it, since the chapters are short enough and the story won't be too long. More importantly, prison rape is not a sex thing, it's a power thing. Many of those who rape other inmates are heterosexual and merely seek to humiliate and put down weaker members through forcing them to submit to it.
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 26, 2011 13:28:35 GMT 1
That image makes me laugh haha...oh man.
On a serious note though, i'm a bit suprised Bailey seems so....well dickish. I mean a lady lost her baby and he dupes her in? That's cruel man, very cruel. In-game he never came across like that. Other then that the shower-soap dropping scene sans shower or soap came a bit out of nowhere...but other then that I still like to see where this is going.
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Post by Mr. Glow on May 26, 2011 14:16:38 GMT 1
"Alive by morning?" Koylat was expected to get raped, not get shanked. Prison rapists always want their sex slaves to live and protect them as such. Thrax eats people too. I was gonna add a line in about him having meat between his teeth or something, but couldn't be bothered. It's AU. It's an old fashioned word that means "said" Thrax actually is gay, though. On the outside, he was the krogan equivalent of Ronnie Kray. On a serious note though, i'm a bit suprised Bailey seems so....well dickish. I mean a lady lost her baby and he dupes her in? That's cruel man, very cruel. In-game he never came across like that. He's working for the Shadow Broker man/
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Post by Warhammer Gorvar on May 26, 2011 14:29:15 GMT 1
Well if it's a alternative universe thing fair enough, it's cool.
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Post by Mr. Glow on May 26, 2011 14:37:07 GMT 1
Oh no, Chora's Den still being open is the only thing that's AU.
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Post by Cali on May 26, 2011 18:22:28 GMT 1
Ah, okay. I can live with that. ^^
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Post by Mr. Glow on Feb 26, 2012 6:25:26 GMT 1
Okay guys the third chapter is up.
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Post by Cali on Sept 5, 2014 0:32:55 GMT 1
Fucking brilliant, Glow. The above is a hilarious example of overused meta-crap in Fanfics. Loving this fic. XD
And yes, I do feel like an idiot for not realizing this fic was satirical.
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Post by Mister Buch on Sept 5, 2014 0:57:01 GMT 1
Yeah me too. I stopped there - and at another line earlier - and thought, "Wait."
Glow you have baffled me over a period of years. Not for the first time, I feel like an idiot in your presence and I don't know why.
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